About mobile
Mobile phone is a useful device which many portion of people in the world use to communicate. At the beginning, it was too expensive to use. However, in these days, most of people, from elementary students to old persons, use it as the necessaries of life. Besides, functions and additional services constantly have being increased. As the result, the number of user is continually expected to be going to increase.
By the way, there are many functions in mobile phone, such as making a call, receiving a call, text messages, mobile banking, taking a picture and scheduling arrangement, etc. And those are continually being enlarged to put together other kinds of functions.
The effects of mobile phone are easy communication, personal assistant, multitasking, etc. By mobile phone, people can many things which they couldn't do before. For example, Parents of children can protect kids from various kind of peril through function of detecting location for 24 hour. People also can banking by it anywhere instead of going to bank.
Mobile phone has several physical characters. For instance, its size is handful and weight is light portably. It also has many kinds of the designs and colors. There are buttons, small screen, and battery, etc in the mobile phone.
Similar things of the mobile phone are wireless telegraph, beeper, etc.
Mobile phone has made our life change. What if there is not a mobile phone in the world now, our life will come to unconveniance.
Sunday, May 11, 2008
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2 comments:
I read your essay about mobile phone which is interested and understand easy.
I think your essay is good structured and is defined well as topic, body and conclusion and is used adverb suitably.
I will talk about my opinion of your essay.
In first paragraph, I think you should need to correct some sentence. I would search " many portion of people" in goggle website, I couldn't find used sentence except your essay. And in last sentence " As the result ~~ ", I think it would be better the active voice than the passive voice
If you append example for the other kinds of functions to last sentence of second paragraph, we can understand more easily. How about navigation or shopping?
Carefully read your essay in third paragraph, you can find error which is no a verb.
In last paragraph, I think you might miss a preposition – " Mobile phone has made our life change" and a spelling.
When I performed this homework, I had some problem. I could seldom find a word which is connected paragraph. We should consider and share this problem.
Good luck !!
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